Dreams Come True
When I was child I had a wish that I can play piano well. Rose is my good friend, she was good at playing piano. When she plays the song in church, I hope I will be like her. I knew my mother had no money to send us to the piano class. So I knew that I must give up. I had good news: the Pastor's wife wanted to teach me to play piano and without any charge. I was so happy that I had the chance. Afterward every Saturday afternoon I learned playing piano in the church. After one year, Pastor's family left the church so my dream also stopped. I still played piano but I had no teacher to teach me. As a teenage, I learner guitar. Although I was not good at playing piano but I can enjoy my music and my dreams come true.
posted by yoyo @ 2:09 AM
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1 Comments:
Very good!
Can you make it clear which sentence is your topic sentence?
Remember to write an topic sentence
so your reader can clearly see the main point of your paragraph!
Some comments:
at play piano
-->at playing piano
But I known my mother has no more money can let me to study piano class.
-->I knew my mother had no money to send us to the piano class.
So I known that I must giving up.
-->I knew...must give up.
One day I hear a good news about Pastor's wife, she want to teach me to play piano and without reserve.
-->I had good news: the Pastor's wife wanted to teach me...without any charge.
I was so happy that I have the chance.
-->...I had...
Afterward every Saturday afternoon I study piano in church.
-->learned playing piano in the church.
past one year Pastor's family leaves church so stop my dream.
-->After one year, the Pastor's family left the church so my dream also stopped.
I still play piano but no teacher teach me.
-->I still played piano but I had no teacher to teach me.
Teenage, I studied guitar.
-->As a teenager, I learner guitar.
I use play guitar's way to play piano.
-->?
Although I was not good at play piano but I can enjoy my music and my dream Come True.
-->at playing piano...
-->my dreams come true.
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